Bobo
April 27th, 2007
Onceupon a time there, lived Bobo.It was night and Bobo was tucked up in his bed with his father telling a story.The lamp is shining brighty on top of Bobo’s bed.In the room everything is made from wood.The wardrobe is wooden.They lived in a caravan in the countryside and it stood there by itseif,all alone by the woods.There lived a wolf who tried to eat Bobo. One day when he went to play with his friends, they had a nice time playing. When they finished playing they went home and left Bobo by himself. He saw the wolf. He ran to his home and took a spear and tried to kill the wolf two times. At last he had killed the wolf that used to eat children. Bob was happy.
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1. Jenny | April 30th, 2007 at 7:52 pm
I thought your introduction was great - you built up some really good detail about Bobo and his caravan. The ending seemed very quick - perhaps you could have put in some more detail?
Glad it was a happy ending though and that Bobo did not get eaten!
Well done
2. Moira | April 30th, 2007 at 8:02 pm
I loved the descriptive language in the beginning of your story. When I was reading I quickly got into your story imagining Bobo in his caravan in the woods.
It would be great if you could find time to look at the action of your story again and build up some suspense to the fight with the wolf.
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