Detective
November 2nd, 2007
Be a detective and work out the clues in this story!
As I walked out of the lift door I could see the beautiful picture through the patterned window. When I came through the door I tripped over a thin water proof jacket left on the floor. I was surprised to see how many videos they had, I guessed about 700, all stacked neatly on six shelves. I went to the first bedroom and I could smell the faint smell of air freshener. On the door was a label saying “DANGER KEEP OUT”. After entering cautiously I noticed a Christmas card saying “best of greetings to you”. It was anonymous. I could also see a whole set of doctor who figures all set up nicely. I was astounded by the amount.
I moved to the bathroom straight away I guffed “uuuurrrrrrrgggghhh” smelling a really strong smell of the same air freshener. They were obviously clean freaks. When I was exiting the room I heard a loud scream….
By Robbie Lucas Age 11, Donbank Primary School.
Entry Filed under: Donbank, Schools, Writer in Residence, Writing
3 Comments Add your own
1. Jenny | November 8th, 2007 at 9:47 pm
Very mysterious - lots of great descriptions and details. The person who lives here sounds very tidy - everything very well organised. And ofcourse likes cleaning - but tell me more!
2. uknown | February 14th, 2008 at 2:50 pm
This is the best story ever! Thank you anyone that leaves a comment!
3. Darran Hainey | February 14th, 2008 at 2:51 pm
This Is A Phonomenal Story Robbie Lucas And Keep Up The Good Luck!
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