Mysterious House
November 21st, 2007
As I walked towards the house I saw that the door was open. I walked into the house and saw lots of shattered glass on the floor. I walked a bit further into the house and saw wine spilt on the floor and a candle with wax dripping onto the floor. There was a big table in the middle of the room with lots of wedding cards on it.
There were also lots of wedding photos and banners. The banners said congratulations. I heard a noise so I ran through to the kitchen panicking. It was the t.v. I was invited here but no-one was in. I could not bear it if the people in this house got hurt! In the kitchen there was a chopping board with lots of vegetables on it. Beside the vegetables there was a knife and an empty bottle of tomato ketchup. There were balloons on the kitchen floor and some were burst. There was a dress on the floor alongside a shirt and tie. There were a pair of heels with one heel broken. There was a message on the answering machine saying “Truly sorry I can’t make it. Speak to you soon though.”
There were footprints going two ways out the house. I followed them but they went into the garden then disappeared.
Hollie






3 Comments Add your own
1. David | November 28th, 2007 at 2:09 pm
Yes, you really have captured the air of mystery about this house, and even brought in the feelings of the 1st person/narrator. Excellent.
David
2. David | November 28th, 2007 at 2:11 pm
You have really captured the air of mystery about this house, and brought in how the visitor feels. Good writing. WEll done.
David
3. Kirstin | May 31st, 2008 at 5:43 pm
Great story Well Done Cya at School
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