The Blue Boat
November 21st, 2007
It was a quiet Wednesday night, it was dark and very calm on the water. A big blue boat was tied up at the harbour.
On board there was a sailor called Bobby and his 4 dogs. Bobby was thin and tall. he had grey hair and brown eyes. he was eighty years old. He had a long grey beard. He neeed some food as he was very hungry. He waited for the number 18 bus. The bus did not come. Bobby looked up to the sky. It had started to snow. He felt very cold. What should he do now?
By Taylor
Entry Filed under: Schools, St Machar Primary
3 Comments Add your own
1. Jenny | November 21st, 2007 at 9:06 pm
I really liked your opening “it was dark and very calm on the water” - it set the scene well. II also thought you described Bobby very well.
I would love to read what happens to Bobby - hope you write some more.
2. Sunnybank | December 11th, 2007 at 2:09 pm
it is ok
3. Sunnybank | December 11th, 2007 at 2:10 pm
It was ok you could make it better at the lol
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