The Old Cottage
September 25th, 2007
Can you work out what sort of person lives in this cottage and what is they might be doing at this very moment?
I arrived at a small cottage. As I walked in I saw an 80th birthday card and some walking sticks. I entered the first room. It was the living room. On the table was a checkers board and some checkers pieces. There was also a happy birthday sign on the wall.
I looked out the window and saw the front garden. The lawn was covered in snow and all the flowers were dead. I opened the window. I heard birds twittering and a tractor in a field and a town in the distance.
I saw another door, it led to the kitchen. There were some more birthday cards and a piece of peper on the worktop saying ‘Eggs, cheese and milk.’ I figured it was a shopping list. I guessed the person was out shopping and had forgotten it. There was also an oven, a kettle and a toaster and some cupboards, some were open, some had food and some had pots and pans in them.
There was a back door as well. So I went out, but it was cold so I came straight back in. I went back to the front door and went upstairs. There was a door open. I went in the door. It had a single bed in the middle of the room and a cupboard full of clothes and a pair of shoes. There was also a newspaper on the bedside table. I looked at my watch; it was time to go.
Aidan. Causewayend School.
Entry Filed under: Causewayend, Schools, Search Inside, Writer in Residence






4 Comments Add your own
1. Jenny | September 25th, 2007 at 2:55 pm
I think there is clever use of the props in this description that tells us exactly whose cottage this is, their age, why they’re not there, and what is so special about this particular day. This was very well thought out.
David
2. callum chalmers | October 5th, 2007 at 10:10 am
It was a pretty good story. I think the guy was happy and organised.
3. joseph and dylan | October 8th, 2007 at 10:09 am
Aidan your story is good. Ithink it is very intresting and funny.
4. avelon and charmaine | October 8th, 2007 at 10:19 am
we think it is a old ladies birthday and she is eighty and she likes reading at bed time.Also we think it is absolutley amazing because of all the details in the writing giving us a good picture. so was the lady shopping ?you also didn’t tell us if there was foot prints in the snow.
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