The Princess and her friends
November 20th, 2006
This is the castle.
Once upon a time in a far away land there lived the princess, her friends, the prince and a witch.
One sunny spring morning the princess Bell and her friends were sitting on the grass in the garden making flower love hearts.
On the 3rd day princess bell woke up from her lovely sleep. When she opened the window from her room she could smell the nice flowers. She quickly ran to the garden and got some flowers. As she was picking some more flowers suddenly a witch grabbed her. The witch took the princess away to her castle and locked her in the tower.
Princess Bell had very, very long hair. The only way the witch could get in and out of the tower was by climbing up and down her hair.
There in the castle the king and the queen were crying for princess Bell.
One day a prince was going by the castle and saw the witch calling for Princess Bell to let her hair down. The prince watched the witch give the princess some food.
When the witch was gone to the forest the prince called, “Bell let your hair go!”
Bell let her hair go and the prince went up into the tower beside bell.
The prince said, “Will you marry me?”
Princess Bell said, “Yes. But what about the bad witch?”
The prince found a spell that could turn the bad witch into a good witch. Then he threw the spell.
The bad witch became a good witch and they all went back to the castle .
The king and queen were very happy when they saw princess Bell. The prince and the princess married and lived happily ever after.
BY REMA P7
Entry Filed under: Kittybrewster
17 Comments Add your own
1. Andy | November 20th, 2006 at 8:30 am
A good story, Rema. You make it sound like a real fairy story. Well done!
2. juuso | November 20th, 2006 at 8:54 am
Yo! Juuso here i liked your story Rema its great work good luck with trying to get level c.
3. jenna | November 21st, 2006 at 5:09 am
I think it was great
4. Elma | November 21st, 2006 at 6:44 am
Hi Rema, it’s Mrs H the writing teacher here! I like how your story has a real beginning, middle and end. It makes it very easy to follow. I’m pleased to see you’re wiring in paragraphs too!
I can just imagine the princess sitting on the grass making the love hearts out of the flowers!
5. Jamie | November 21st, 2006 at 10:55 am
that was ace
6. sofina | November 21st, 2006 at 11:13 am
Hi Rema, just read your story and would like to say well done! It’s a really well written and structured short story, with lots of details.
Well done ! Im going to share it with my class during story time
7. rikki | November 22nd, 2006 at 4:07 am
well done good wrighting
8. Samantha x | November 23rd, 2006 at 2:15 am
Hey! Thought your story was cool and bit a original.More a girls story than boys.
9. Robert | November 23rd, 2006 at 2:15 am
I like it, it’s really fairy tale like, especially the ending.
10. Kyle | November 23rd, 2006 at 2:16 am
It’’s a good fairy tale. Your spelling is good and your writing is excellent.
11. Daniel | November 23rd, 2006 at 2:16 am
Great story Rema. It was a great fairy tale.Good descriptive writing.
12. Callum | November 23rd, 2006 at 2:16 am
Yeah it was pretty good but it’s not my kind of story because i’m a boy.And you should take one or two of the word flower out because you used too many.
13. Liam | November 23rd, 2006 at 2:18 am
It wasn’t bad but it was too much like normal fairy stories.It was a bit to girly for me.Still a good story.
14. Michael | November 23rd, 2006 at 2:19 am
Great but is like a normal fairy tale story, could have a bit more writing. But over all a good story. WELL DONE
15. shelley | November 23rd, 2006 at 2:19 am
I think the fairytale was good. I enjoyed the story.Well done.
16. shantel | November 30th, 2006 at 5:15 am
great story wish it was me
17. porter family | February 18th, 2007 at 10:59 pm
nice story rema tegan and kayden thought so too well done
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